Changes Made Based on Feedback
On the basis of the lecturer's feedback, I made a number of changes to the work. I started by changing the introduction. The teacher had suggested that the first paragraph should focus more on the interviewer's connection with the uncle in his comments. As a result, since the earlier line did not discuss the relationship, I removed it. The citations were also eliminated because they suggested that the concepts were taken from a book rather than from personal experience. I also deleted the portions of the essay that were cited because they did not expand on the interview's experience. I based the article more on my own experience than on research. I also changed the conclusion. I replaced it with one that gave a summary of the teachings that I got from the interview rather than from general knowledge or books. The current conclusion of the paper is more personalized than the previous one.
Additions to the Body
In the body, I have included elements that were missing from the draft. The current paper has descriptions and explanations of how Uncle Jack received the news of the illness and how he coped with it. It also has descriptions of how he told his family and how they received the news. The paper talks about the different emotional stages that Uncle Jack went through after getting the news of cancer. It explains how he was affected by cancer and how he coped up.
Important Details
The parts that remained the same are the description of his drinking and smoking because they are important in explaining what predisposed him to the cancer.
