Your Persuasive Paper Part I- A Problem Exists should be revised using comments from the instructor and fellow students.
Clearly stated a tenable, pertinent thesis in the first line.
The thesis statement of the persuasive essay is succinctly expressed, which makes it easier to understand the subject at hand.
In addition to the thesis statement, the author should have given a succinct summary of the work.
Describe a thorough, workable answer that bolsters your thesis. A line or two (1-2) should be used for this.
The author has offered a number of workable options, which successfully supports the thesis.
Apart from the solutions, the author should have adequately analyzed how employers need to effectively implement the FMLA.
4. State, explain, and support the first advantage (economic, social, political, environmental, social, equitable, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.
The paper contains a clear argument on the need to train leaders on the employment policies in order to curb the abuse of FMLA.
The author should have explored more on the employment policies relevant to FMLA.
5. State, explain, and support the second advantage (economic, social, political, environmental, social, equitable, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.
The paper also shows that managers can control the abuse of FMLA through recertification.
The author ought to have outlined how managers can recertify workers.
6. State, explain, and support the third (and fourth if desired) advantage (economic, social, political, environment, social, equitable, ethical/moral, etc.) to your solution. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.
There is a vivid explanation on how controlling the abuse of FMLA will improve the productivity of companies.
The author should include more evidence on how employees are likely to benefit from the control of FMLA abuse.
7. Use effective transitional words, phrases, and sentences.
The use of transitional words improves the quality of the paper significantly.
The author should use transitional words effectively.
8. Provide a concluding paragraph
/transitional paragraph that summarizes the proposed solution and its advantages.
A concluding paragraph summarizes the solutions to the abuse of FMLA.
The author ought to have scrutinized the shortcomings of the implementation of the strategies for controlling the abuse of FMLA.
9. Develop a coherently structured paper with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
A coherent structure with all the main sections.
The brief and short paragraphs should be improved.
10. Use one or more rhetorical strategies (ethos, logos, pathos) to explain advantages.
The use of logos helped with the presentation of arguments in the paper.
It is important for the author to use more rhetorical strategies.
11. Support advantage claims with at least three (3) additional quality relevant references. Use at least six (6) totals for Parts 1 & 2.
The document has an adequate number of references.
The author needs to examine the nature of reference materials in order to obtain relevant information.
12. Other
The paper effectively accounts for the strategies for improving the use of FMLA.
Sub-titles should be used in the paper.
