Academic articles have a number of characteristics. The thesis statement is one of the most important aspects of academic papers because it informs readers of what to expect in the body of these literacy items. A thesis statement summarizes the key points of an essay or term paper in a single word, sentence, or group of sentences (Roscoe et al. 39). Most articles, particularly rhetoric essays, must also concentrate on the target audiences. The identification of the target audience aids in determining the source’s validity and applicability (Jowett and Victoria 330). This piece is a response to two previous works that focused on education and racism and A visual rhetoric analysis-Rosie the Riveter poster.
A Visual Rhetoric Analysis-Rosie the Riveter Poster
The key issues with this paper are that it lacked a proper thesis statement and failed to identify its target audience. While the content of this piece remained outstanding, the paper did not focus on the rhetoric appeals used by the artist of the Rosie the Riveter Poster. The primary objective of the artist who came up with this literacy piece was to empower women at their times of need not to give up as they could do it.
The possible thesis statement for this paper was, “Art is an avenue in which various individuals showcase their abilities to connect reality and fiction. Rosie the Riveter Poster is such an outstanding art that not only serves an aesthetic function but also passes a particular message to its audience.”
The audience part of this paper needed major corrections and improvements. Initially, only the rhetoric appeals were identified and not the audience, Therefore, below is the significant correction made on the content regarding the audience.
Most artists come up with pieces of art with their audiences in mind. The Rosie the Riveter Poster has several audience groups. However, the most apparent of all these groups are the working-class women who can benefit more from the purpose of this art. The women in the second world war needed the motivation to carry on with their lives. This group of individuals were forced to undertake the duties of men while they were in the battlefields. Unfortunately, the dawn of the second world war marked misfortunes for this group of individuals as their male counterparts came back and took the available working opportunities. Therefore, the Rosie the Riveter Poster served as a form of encouragement to the ladies that they had lost their jobs but not everything. The second group of the audience of the Rosie the Riveter art piece is the male members of the society. The Rosie the Riveter Poster informs men that women can do whatever can be done by the individuals of the masculine gender and with the highest perfection. This piece of art sends a chilling message to men that feminism is on the rise and they must accept the role of women in the society. Lastly, the feminists are the third audience that can be well-served by the Rosie the Riveter Poster. This population uses the poster to fight for the rights of the oppressed and the inequalities that exist in the different aspects of the world. The world has witnessed a rapid rise in the number of feminists’ groups that work tirelessly to ensure that the globe is free from the different forms of oppressions against the feminine gender. Therefore, the Rosie the Riveter Poster targets this audience group and provides them with a basis of their campaigns against women oppression.
Improvements in the Writing
The key areas of improvement in the writing are the ability to comprehend whatever the art talked about and to use it in defining the audience of the art and in coming up with appropriate content. Initially, there was a limited sense of direction as I could not apply my reasoning skills in analyzing the skills. However, the area that needs much improvement is the scope of rhetoric appeals. More study must be made to ensure that a concise disciplinary knowledge of the rhetoric triangles is demonstrated in future assignments. The understanding of the rhetoric triangles will be of uttermost benefits as it would ensure that a scholar has the appropriate knowledge on analyzing the purpose of different pieces of literature. The spelling and other mechanic errors were absent in this paper, and the paper had an excellent flow of ideas. I tried to improve this content by analyzing the potential audiences of the art and created a thesis statement relevant to the paper content.
Research paper- Education and Race
The paper also failed to provide an appropriate thesis statement to match the content of the paper. Also, there was a non-existent analysis of the audiences of the different sources analyzed.
Education is a basic right that all the individuals in all the regions of the globe must possess without any forms of discrimination. Therefore, racism in learning institutions must be stopped since it bars schools, students, stakeholders in the field of education, and the community from attaining their expectations on the schooling system.
Anderson’s potential audience for this piece is the population of school going students and their instructors. This author successfully uses the emotional appeal to these types of audiences and strives to pass a particular message that is to stop racism in the different educational settings. Anderson’s main objective to address the issue of racism in schools and to ask the students to stop practicing it though she does this indirectly. A key notable feature of Anderson’s piece is her ability to integrate facts with stories to come up with an excellent piece that advocates for justice in the schools. The second audience group for this literacy piece are the teachers in American schools. The author strives to use Zion Agostini’s story to inflict some emotional sense to teachers and ask them to aid in stopping racial prejudice in schools. Anderson successfully appeals to these two types of audiences using logic and applying the ethos appeal.
While Diamond discuses the different opportunities available in the educational system with particular interest in integrated schools, this author notes that scholars are not accorded with the necessary support to acquire these opportunities. The potential target audience of Diamond’s piece are the individuals in the management positions in most integrated schools. This article serves an enlightening purpose as it notifies the public and the audience of the evils that currently exist in integrated learning institutions. The major appeal that this author has to the management of the integrated schools is that they should not let skin complexion be the main basis for awarding educational opportunities to the students. All school-going children have the right to access the opportunities that education has to offer and the various stakeholders in integrated schools must ensure that there exists an equal distribution of the educational resources and opportunities to all the students regardless of their races.
Flores primary audiences include parents, students, school management boards and mathematical teachers in elementary and middle schools. While the various governments provide a promise of equal opportunities to all students, most of them have failed to honor these promises. This renowned author was tactical in handling the matter of inequalities in mathematical education, and the first target audience was the managements of the schools in rural areas in places with large Latinos and African American populations. The author’s piece indirectly appeals to these boards to employ qualified professionals in the field of mathematics who will ensure that they put a balance in the current imbalanced mathematical education. The second audience group, mathematics teachers, also have a task to fulfil. These individuals must be willing to teach in harsh learning environments including the rural areas. Parents and students must also understand that there exist natural diversities in student understanding of mathematics. Therefore, the teachers, schools, and community should not be blamed rather the students must ensure that they get the best out of the meagre resources that might be available to their learning settings. This author successfully educates to these three audiences using the logos appeal.
The target audience for Donnor’s piece was the legal personnel in the American Judicial system. These persons are charged with the tasks of ensuring that justice is served and equality is observed in the different sectors of the economy. This author presents a case that he finds unrealistic as the judgement was passed in favor of a particular group of individuals, i.e., the Caucasian Americans who fought against having schools integrated voluntarily. While this author used ethos appeal in the paper to convince the readers that his point on racism in the educational system is credible, much logic is evident. Consequently, the target group is furnished with both knowledge and facts that they can utilize in arguing for the voluntary integration of public schools.
The primary audience for this piece is the schools’ admission boards. This group of individuals determine the persons who are to join a given learning institution and the qualification requirement for all the scholars. However, most school boards have failed in ensuring that diversity is observed when admitting students in the schools. Most admission boards discriminate students basing on their families’ financial might and the skin complexions. Therefore, there exist no forms of equality in learning facilities. Ayscue and Orfiel exploited the situation to make clear the fact that all students are the same and to use the logos appeal to persuade this audience to be considerate of all social factors when admitting students and when awarding educational opportunities.
Resmovits’ article had early childhood educators and parents as its target audience. The early childhood educators must ensure that they change the prototyped mindsets of their students to accommodate the various diversities that exist in learning institutions. Parents must ensure that they give the right sense of direction and give their children the benefits of living and schooling in a racially diverse setting.
Similar to the first paper, the main improvements in this piece has been on the thesis statement and the audience. Also, some few syntax errors were eliminated, and the citation improved. This paper also requires more improvement in the scope of rhetoric appeals. This appeals are vital in any work of literature. Therefore, I would strive to ensure that I obtained the relevant knowledge regarding ethical appeals. I tried to improve the work by using an open-minded perspective to analyze the potential audiences of the pieces as well as to devise a thesis statement relevant to the paper contents.
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