A peer review‘Facts and Arguments’ Piece by Juliana Martine

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Juliana Martine’s key concern in the article “Facts and Arguments” is, “How do people describe an optimal motherhood?” The paper starts with an introduction, telling her about her author, and how she dressed her dolls as a little girl, thereby giving her a reasonable understanding of the ideal of motherhood. She taught all the tasks that a mother is supposed to do, such as cooking, weaving, washing, and baking. Juliana became a nanny at the age of eleven, which inspired her peers to call her mum, or to say that she would be a great mother, considering the fact that she had no children. I believe the fact that she gives a personal approach to the topic makes it an interesting and relevant paper.

The paper is easy and clear to read due to the choice of simple language and words. One does not need to use complex grammar to explain a point, but careful choice of words is important to ensure that it is easy to read and a reader will not waste time looking for meanings in a dictionary. There are a few grammar mistakes such as using a plural verb are with a collective noun group of moms in the sentence: “Another recent pop-culture reference to motherhood is the movie Bad Moms in which a group of moms are fed up with the expectations of working mothers” Punctuation marks in the paper are correctly used except the use of commas where some sentences lack commas or commas have been wrongly placed. Examples of the misuse of commas can be seen in a sentence” I always had a way with kids, and started babysitting when I was 11 years old”, which uses an unnecessary comma in a compound predicate. The general organization of the paper is good but not excellent due to the lengthy paragraphs.

The arguments and conclusion offered in the paper merge with the evidence provided by the author. Additionally, the arguments provided address the topic. For example, some of the reliable evidence include mothers watching their kids playing in the lawns as they cook and clean, the TV series ‘Bad Moms’ and Fergie’s music video M.I.L.F, where moms are portrayed in different ways. There is no only one right way to be a mother, and every mother has a different view of motherhood. The conclusion that the author arrives at: ‘Leave Moms Alone!’ is thus consistent with evidence provided.

Figures and tables are not included in the paper. The area of research that has not been dressed or argues in this paper is the life of normal mothers. The arguments that have been used such as ‘Fergie’s Music Video, M.I.L.F’ and ‘Bad Moms’ may not provide an accurate account since producers’ aim is to sell their videos and not to describe what real motherhood is. In order to make the paper better, the author can conduct a research to determine what people think about motherhood.

The main strengths of this paper include the author’s attempt to address motherhood as a contemporary issue. The use of personal approach and relevant literature strengthens the evidence presented. Some of the weaknesses include grammatical errors, punctuation, and overall organization. Generally, the paper is good and the few errors are present.

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